What do I need to revise on my drafts

After our first draft, we got feedback from Ms. Guarino, and she suggested us to change most of the thing somehow, in order to get an equal amount for everyone and give David a real character that is from one of the stories instead of just a random narrator. So, we added the idea from the story "Children of the Sea," combined this story with our original idea "Nineteen Thirty-Seven." David is the boy in the story "Children of the Sea," he will be telling the stories that happened on the boat. Cassidy is the character that combines both Josephine and the girl narrator in "Children of the Sea." I will be two different characters, one is Manman, and another one would be Celianne. Because this two-character they have things in common, which is their tragic life and they are both mothers, who always love and think about their children. Why I choose Celianne out of all other characters is because that our main theme (at the end of the performance) that we are highlighting is the things happened on mothers and lovers and others back that time.Also, another reason would be that "mother" is also the critical character that Edwidge Danticat want to highlight and use as one of her central ideas. Also, because of that I have two characters to act out, and I have to change the costume, if we are doing scene change and everything there won't be enough time for us, so we came up with an idea of dividing the stage into three different parts of the setting. Center Left would be David on the boat with blue lighting to show that he is on the ship, the center would be me in prison with normal light, the Center Right would be Cassidy with normal light. In order to do a better job on my part, I will make the connection between switching characters and scenes more smoothly, and focus more on the acting and with more emotions. Also, make sure to act out the different feeling of Celianne and Manman, audiences should tell they are different characters not only from the costume and lines that David is saying. Also, I need to make the gestures and all the movements that I am doing for two characters more clearly. When Josephine comes to the prison to visit me for the first time, I should show more of a caring towards her. Also, I should show her the feeling of pretending everything is fine along with the weakness and almost dying kind of attitude. I should say the lines more weakly and maybe with more pauses, maybe more air sound of the voice. When Josephine visits me for the second time, I should be like a little bit strong and acting like I do not really want to talk to her, in order to let her not depend and be sad for my leaving, because I know that I am dying soon.